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The darker shade of love by ~jaggy:iconjaggy:



The Darker Shade of Love

Lying in a potential car-crash state
I observe the moon, alone,
I wanted to share this place with someone
But of course you already have the moon

  Bright moon won't come back
  Bright moon on my back
   moon moon baby fade to black

Stupid Gemini twin will die
My arms open wide
Crucified against the great night sky
Suspended eternal in a dead half-hug

  Dark dark baby in my heart
  Dark tumors in my heart
   look what happens, when you fall apart

Lady, colour me with your kiss
Lie to me
Make me so happy I could almost explode
And paint the goddamn walls with my stare
©2004-2009 ~jaggy
:iconjaggy:

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:icontasteslikebrning:
I really enjoy this poem, it flows really well throughout most of the poem, and the words are well chosen and very emotive in this piece.

I think this is a +Fav, and I don't usually do that. I'm def. going to check you out right now...

Morgan

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-Morgan Brown

"Posters of my favourite whores
Decorate unpainted walls" -wake up
:iconsweet-agony:
first thought--morrissey.

other thoughts - very tactfully completed and so many scrumptious lines. i like the way you repeated certain words. repetition can be hard to pull off, but i think the flow you created made it possible. you deserve a lollipop.

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Meanwhile I talk to myself, as one who has plenty of time. No one tells me anything new; so I tell myself to myself.
:iconjaggy:
wow. 'tis a compliment indeed :)

Thank you for the lollypop

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Guess my life is a compromise.
:iconjaggy:
Thanks muchly :) I shall be sure to check you out also...

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Guess my life is a compromise.
:icontorturegoddess:
Wonderful. The bit about already having the moon, especially. Tragically beautiful, as your work usually is.
:iconjaggy:
Tragically beautiful!
Why thank you. That's one of my most favouritest comments, ever.

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Guess my life is a compromise.
:icontorturegoddess:
You're quite welcome.

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